Nice flow: I like that you're not straining for tidy rhymes. Although the overall sound is quite different, reminds me of Wye Oak's "I Hope You Die."

Nice flow: I like that you're not straining for tidy rhymes. Although the overall sound is quite different, reminds me of Wye Oak's "I Hope You Die."

Great song writing once again.  Unique feel to it also.

Great song writing once again. Unique feel to it also.

It's a good song, well executed, although the vocal does miss the right note a couple of times.

It's a good song, well executed, although the vocal does miss the right note a couple of times. :)

Great song!
Mixing seems not so bad on my headphones...

Great song! Mixing seems not so bad on my headphones...

One of your best!  I think the mixing of the track sounds great!

One of your best! I think the mixing of the track sounds great!

I like the arrangement and the way the vocals sound.  It's interesting to read your intention behind the lyrics and it's interesting to see how widely they can be interpreted.  I wasn't really thinking serial killer, although I can totally see it now that you mention it.  To me it was maybe more describing an anxiety attack, although I figured it was something darker than that since you described it as disturbing.

I like the arrangement and the way the vocals sound. It's interesting to read your intention behind the lyrics and it's interesting to see how widely they can be interpreted. I wasn't really thinking serial killer, although I can totally see it now that you mention it. To me it was maybe more describing an anxiety attack, although I figured it was something darker than that since you described it as disturbing.

always a surprise what i'm going to find when i click on your beats, but i really appreciate your exploration & melding of genres. i really like how the vocals are done in this one, and the mix seems solid to me (though i'm not very good at mixing, so that doesn't count for too much coming from me hah). nice work!

always a surprise what i'm going to find when i click on your beats, but i really appreciate your exploration & melding of genres. i really like how the vocals are done in this one, and the mix seems solid to me (though i'm not very good at mixing, so that doesn't count for too much coming from me hah). nice work!

Chorus, really makes the song. Great vocal work and some really nice production surprises... You really pack a lot in a week! I'm in awe. One of my favs. 

Chorus, really makes the song. Great vocal work and some really nice production surprises... You really pack a lot in a week! I'm in awe. One of my favs.

Thank you.  Never heard that track before - great singer and super creepy track!  Thanks for the recommendation and for listening!

Means a lot coming from you.  Thank you.

Thanks for this feedback, I am inclined to agree as well.  Do you have any particular notes on lines/places it is off?  I was also thinking of doing some sort of tuning of the vocal file to fix it, if not re-record outright.

Thanks!  I just want to give it a whole touch up before proper release, thank you though!  Glad you are into it.

Wow!  Very flattering!  I am really excited about the composition, but was bummed about the production because of the speaker issue.  I am definitely going to work on it a bit more.

Ooh, I like your interpretation of anxiety creeping in and taking over.  Very nice.  Thanks for listening and "going there" with me on the journey.

Thanks man!  I just want to be remembered as a musician that was expectedly unexpected   Glad you enjoyed the vocals and the mix.  I think I can improve a bit of the delivery at a few places and can't wait to really polish this.

Thanks!  I could have made it even better had my equip. not freaked out!  Very flattered and I always hope to surprise you with the WBs!

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[quote=Jim Wood]Nice flow: I like that you're not straining for tidy rhymes. Although the overall sound is quite different, reminds me of Wye Oak's "I Hope You Die."[/quote] Thank you. Never heard that track before - great singer and super creepy track! Thanks for the recommendation and for listening! [quote=rdomain]Great song writing once again. Unique feel to it also. [/quote] Means a lot coming from you. Thank you. [quote=thawkins]It's a good song, well executed, although the vocal does miss the right note a couple of times. :)[/quote] Thanks for this feedback, I am inclined to agree as well. Do you have any particular notes on lines/places it is off? I was also thinking of doing some sort of tuning of the vocal file to fix it, if not re-record outright. [quote=theGuen]Great song! Mixing seems not so bad on my headphones...[/quote] Thanks! I just want to give it a whole touch up before proper release, thank you though! Glad you are into it. [quote=demonzor]One of your best! I think the mixing of the track sounds great![/quote] Wow! Very flattering! I am really excited about the composition, but was bummed about the production because of the speaker issue. I am definitely going to work on it a bit more. [quote=CosmicCairns]I like the arrangement and the way the vocals sound. It's interesting to read your intention behind the lyrics and it's interesting to see how widely they can be interpreted. I wasn't really thinking serial killer, although I can totally see it now that you mention it. To me it was maybe more describing an anxiety attack, although I figured it was something darker than that since you described it as disturbing.[/quote] Ooh, I like your interpretation of anxiety creeping in and taking over. Very nice. Thanks for listening and "going there" with me on the journey. [quote=ahhsumx]always a surprise what i'm going to find when i click on your beats, but i really appreciate your exploration & melding of genres. i really like how the vocals are done in this one, and the mix seems solid to me (though i'm not very good at mixing, so that doesn't count for too much coming from me hah). nice work![/quote] Thanks man! I just want to be remembered as a musician that was expectedly unexpected ;) Glad you enjoyed the vocals and the mix. I think I can improve a bit of the delivery at a few places and can't wait to really polish this. [quote=NWSPR]Chorus, really makes the song. Great vocal work and some really nice production surprises... You really pack a lot in a week! I'm in awe. One of my favs. [/quote] Thanks! I could have made it even better had my equip. not freaked out! Very flattered and I always hope to surprise you with the WBs! HEY LOOK I RESPONDED TO SOME MESSAGES

Re: the off vocal notes - listening again it's not super obvious, but the places that felt off for me were:
but can you *survive* or see in the dark?
I wish you could *stay*
there’s no greater *pain* than being *alive*

Basically it's the places where you have a bigger interval jump. I think it's not so much that the notes are off (if they are, it's just a tiny little amount), but that it seems that you initially end up on the wrong note and then "glide" up to the correct one. I think maybe that's what you actually wanted to do, but it ends up sounding a little bit like you didn't plan it so it's sort of a nervous wobble trying to get to the right note. Maybe I am imagining things though.

Re: the off vocal notes - listening again it's not super obvious, but the places that felt off for me were: but can you *survive* or see in the dark? I wish you could *stay* there’s no greater *pain* than being *alive* Basically it's the places where you have a bigger interval jump. I think it's not so much that the notes are off (if they are, it's just a tiny little amount), but that it seems that you initially end up on the wrong note and then "glide" up to the correct one. I think maybe that's what you actually wanted to do, but it ends up sounding a little bit like you didn't plan it so it's sort of a nervous wobble trying to get to the right note. Maybe I am imagining things though. :)

This is really helpful because your notes corroborate my own impressions.  I have such a hard time judging vocals.  I've been thinking about investing in some pitch correction software, not so much as to digitally correct my voice, but for the visual note tracking features so I could "see" where I am off.  Another thing that I've tried, that just takes extra time, is to play a piano track with the notes of the vocal line, and then isolate the two and then it is a lot easier to hear any off notes.

Also, made some headway into looking up some vocal teachers in the area!  I want to get back into performing guitar + singing live!

Thanks for your help, (you and everyone else) this is very encouraging.  I have been very insecure about my singing but I feel like I have a good start and just need some help and some time to become better

[quote=thawkins]Re: the off vocal notes - listening again it's not super obvious, but the places that felt off for me were: but can you *survive* or see in the dark? I wish you could *stay* there’s no greater *pain* than being *alive* Basically it's the places where you have a bigger interval jump. I think it's not so much that the notes are off (if they are, it's just a tiny little amount), but that it seems that you initially end up on the wrong note and then "glide" up to the correct one. I think maybe that's what you actually wanted to do, but it ends up sounding a little bit like you didn't plan it so it's sort of a nervous wobble trying to get to the right note. Maybe I am imagining things though. :)[/quote] This is really helpful because your notes corroborate my own impressions. I have such a hard time judging vocals. I've been thinking about investing in some pitch correction software, not so much as to digitally correct my voice, but for the visual note tracking features so I could "see" where I am off. Another thing that I've tried, that just takes extra time, is to play a piano track with the notes of the vocal line, and then isolate the two and then it is a lot easier to hear any off notes. Also, made some headway into looking up some vocal teachers in the area! I want to get back into performing guitar + singing live! :) Thanks for your help, (you and everyone else) this is very encouraging. I have been very insecure about my singing but I feel like I have a good start and just need some help and some time to become better :heart:

I would strongly suggest not to get software to fix your vocals, but instead really play the piano or any other tuned instrument along with your singing. This way you will get a much better feeling how to sing the way you want *and* get all those intervals and sounds into muscle memory. Also you will train your hearing to know when something's wrong. Even if you do get software down the line, you will still need your ears to know if it's actually working, because that's where it matters - you can't put the readouts of some software dial saying it's pitch perfect on your album after all.

I am glad if my advice is useful. I would say your music is pretty well sung and produced already, but I also know how you can be your own worst critic. Just keep on trying to do better, as long as there are some moments when you record something feeling that "yeah, I am enjoying this!", then you are on the right path. It's way better to be a little insecure and striving to do better than being self-confident but terribly bad at what you do.

I would strongly suggest not to get software to fix your vocals, but instead really play the piano or any other tuned instrument along with your singing. This way you will get a much better feeling how to sing the way you want *and* get all those intervals and sounds into muscle memory. Also you will train your hearing to know when something's wrong. Even if you do get software down the line, you will still need your ears to know if it's actually working, because that's where it matters - you can't put the readouts of some software dial saying it's pitch perfect on your album after all. :) I am glad if my advice is useful. I would say your music is pretty well sung and produced already, but I also know how you can be your own worst critic. Just keep on trying to do better, as long as there are some moments when you record something feeling that "yeah, I am enjoying this!", then you are on the right path. It's way better to be a little insecure and striving to do better than being self-confident but terribly bad at what you do. :)

It gives me a 90s alt rock kinda vibe. Nice work!

It gives me a 90s alt rock kinda vibe. Nice work!

Sweet tune! I thought this was about the world going to shit..which in a way, I guess it is for the victim. Awesome work!

Sweet tune! I thought this was about the world going to shit..which in a way, I guess it is for the victim. Awesome work!

Damn that was such a catchy chorus, I was hum-singing along.  Without realizing the intention of the lyrics it reminded me slightly of the Get Up Kids' Campfire Kansas. Just in the strummy-you-gotta-sing-along feel   Your voice actually reminded me a bit at times of Sponge back in the 90s too.  *listens to the chorus again!*

Damn that was such a catchy chorus, I was hum-singing along. Without realizing the intention of the lyrics it reminded me slightly of the Get Up Kids' Campfire Kansas. Just in the strummy-you-gotta-sing-along feel :) Your voice actually reminded me a bit at times of Sponge back in the 90s too. *listens to the chorus again!*

Back to your grungy ways this week, I see.

That's how you become internet famous on WB.

Back to your grungy ways this week, I see. [quote]HEY LOOK I RESPONDED TO SOME MESSAGES[/quote]That's how you become internet famous on WB.

Great songwriting, reminds me that I still have a soft spot for 90's alt-rock. Love this!
The mix works well for me, in my headphones at least.

Great songwriting, reminds me that I still have a soft spot for 90's alt-rock. Love this! The mix works well for me, in my headphones at least.

Very cool track young man... Like the boldness of guitar and vocals, really strong open honest and in your face (in a great way)

Very cool track young man... Like the boldness of guitar and vocals, really strong open honest and in your face (in a great way)

Man, this is so good.

Man, this is so good.

Oh this is easily one of your best. Love the chorus on the vocals! I'd love to remix this one day. Uplifting future bass?

Oh this is easily one of your best. Love the chorus on the vocals! I'd love to remix this one day. Uplifting future bass? :D

Great vocal and lyrics, refreshing to hear a vocal/ guitar forward song, you have great voice!

Great vocal and lyrics, refreshing to hear a vocal/ guitar forward song, you have great voice!

Ohhh Wow, Großartig!
Sorry for my late quote
And sorry had to talk in German.
Du bist unglaublich abwechslungsreich in deinen Stilen, der absolute Hammer !!
I Love your Music >ILYM<
 

Ohhh Wow, Großartig! Sorry for my late quote And sorry had to talk in German. Du bist unglaublich abwechslungsreich in deinen Stilen, der absolute Hammer !! I Love your Music >ILYM< [img=PunBB bbcode test]http://tronicspider.com/WB18/M2K7Cover080.jpg[/img]

This makes me happy. Reminds me of the feeling I got from Oasis records in the 90s.

This makes me happy. Reminds me of the feeling I got from Oasis records in the 90s.