Those whirring high-end synths sure are hypnotic. Your songs sure pack some neat sounds!

Those whirring high-end synths sure are hypnotic. Your songs sure pack some neat sounds!

Mesmerizing melodies and harmonies. I particularly like the melody on the prechorus bits right before the "I never wanted to be/leave here" sections. The slowdown halfway was unexpected, and I really liked that the whirring on the synth slowed accordingly.

As far as lyrics, I think you're already doing great. I think focusing on writing the song has a big payoff, and this is proof. A good song beats a perfect recording seven days a week, but I think this is a good recording too.

I love a good pun (e.g. the punishment), so I'll share one I thought of as I was listening and reading along with your lyrics. You use a tire metaphor in the "wearing the treads down on my years" line. Made me think "My tires are tired". Not sure if that's usable, but I would definitely include that sort of thing in the cheesy stuff I write.

Mesmerizing melodies and harmonies. I particularly like the melody on the prechorus bits right before the "I never wanted to be/leave here" sections. The slowdown halfway was unexpected, and I really liked that the whirring on the synth slowed accordingly. As far as lyrics, I think you're already doing great. I think focusing on writing the song has a big payoff, and this is proof. A good song beats a perfect recording seven days a week, but I think this is a good recording too. I love a good pun (e.g. the punishment), so I'll share one I thought of as I was listening and reading along with your lyrics. You use a tire metaphor in the "wearing the treads down on my years" line. Made me think "My tires are tired". Not sure if that's usable, but I would definitely include that sort of thing in the cheesy stuff I write.

Solid track. Really like the way you sing, harmonies are pretty cool. Agreed that guitar solo could probably worked a little more, but still a cool song.

Solid track. Really like the way you sing, harmonies are pretty cool. Agreed that guitar solo could probably worked a little more, but still a cool song.

This is another great track, man. I think you've got a great voice, and I really like having new stuff to listen to each week.

This is another great track, man. I think you've got a great voice, and I really like having new stuff to listen to each week. :)

Oh yea wobbly indie electro synth delight! Superb transitions towards 02:11! Well done!

Oh yea wobbly indie electro synth delight! Superb transitions towards 02:11! Well done!

I think the lyrics are solid.  I'm often not a fan of repetitive lines, but it really works here both musically and then following it up with a line about repeating yourself and later a mention of echoes ties it all together.  Gotta agree with everyone else on that wobbly synth line being cool.

I think the lyrics are solid. I'm often not a fan of repetitive lines, but it really works here both musically and then following it up with a line about repeating yourself and later a mention of echoes ties it all together. Gotta agree with everyone else on that wobbly synth line being cool.

Dude, churning out full songs like this week to week is so damn impressive. This is super nice. Love the synths in the verses, gives me Doves vibes. Also, loving these songs of yours that change it up in like a B section/bridge. Really expands the scope of the song and makes you feel like you've gone on a little journey.

Dude, churning out full songs like this week to week is so damn impressive. This is super nice. Love the synths in the verses, gives me Doves vibes. Also, loving these songs of yours that change it up in like a B section/bridge. Really expands the scope of the song and makes you feel like you've gone on a little journey.

This is a cool track! I like the fast wobbly synth sound in the background. Good vocal and harmonies! I like the intermission with accoustic guitars and how it builds up into the guitar solo. That's one cool tune!

This is a cool track! I like the fast wobbly synth sound in the background. Good vocal and harmonies! I like the intermission with accoustic guitars and how it builds up into the guitar solo. That's one cool tune!

big 90s pop groove through the beginning, proper millennium chic. great vocal melodies too

big 90s pop groove through the beginning, proper millennium chic. great vocal melodies too <3

Nice one. I like warbling synth. I like these lyrics and the vocal, I get a feeling for what they're conveying and that's important. Yeah that acoustic guitar middle part is a great change, then a nice solo, sweet. Agree with comment above about how focus on that part of the song paid off. It's ok to leave some things for a v2 always. Hard to make those choices, and that's why doing weekly songs is so great, forces us to make choices and actually finish a version. Great v1  and I know the v2 will be huge!

Nice one. I like warbling synth. I like these lyrics and the vocal, I get a feeling for what they're conveying and that's important. Yeah that acoustic guitar middle part is a great change, then a nice solo, sweet. Agree with comment above about how focus on that part of the song paid off. It's ok to leave some things for a v2 always. Hard to make those choices, and that's why doing weekly songs is so great, forces us to make choices and actually finish a version. Great v1 and I know the v2 will be huge!

I'm always impressed the singer/songwriters on here are able to churn out the lyrics and music.  It's one thing coming up with the poetic feel of it but then to have the rhythm of it and all would just make my tiny brain explode.  Meanwhile I'm chord stabbing my piano lol!  Really relate to the lyrics.  Especially the "just another sunbeat paint job on the highway".  Excellent vocal harmonies as well.  I could've listened to the oooh and strums even longer   Very peaceful

I'm always impressed the singer/songwriters on here are able to churn out the lyrics and music. It's one thing coming up with the poetic feel of it but then to have the rhythm of it and all would just make my tiny brain explode. Meanwhile I'm chord stabbing my piano lol! Really relate to the lyrics. Especially the "just another sunbeat paint job on the highway". Excellent vocal harmonies as well. I could've listened to the oooh and strums even longer :) Very peaceful

Vocals and lyrics are well thought out. Love the layers of chorus rolling in and the mid break is very lush.  This is one of your more sparse tracks on the instrumentation. Good drum tracks that stand out as a result of less instrumentation. Definitely look forward to hearing the revised version as it fills out! 

Vocals and lyrics are well thought out. Love the layers of chorus rolling in and the mid break is very lush. This is one of your more sparse tracks on the instrumentation. Good drum tracks that stand out as a result of less instrumentation. Definitely look forward to hearing the revised version as it fills out!

oooh the breakdown in the middle - lovely piece!

oooh the breakdown in the middle - lovely piece! [img]https://miro.medium.com/max/860/1*16PZNwyrERwruo3aUhsRsw.gif[/img]

It's cool. I felt it deserves a second listen after a day before I said anything about lyrics. I like the music and composition, and it fits the emotion of being in a place and accepting it altho somewhere in the back of the mind you're thinking, "what else is there?", at least that's how I interpret the song.

I think in terms of lyrics it gets a bit too complicated for me to follow, and it's something I realized after a fellow weeklybeatmeister introduced me to a genius songwriter called Randy Newman - I heard one of his songs (I think he's hiding) about the Big Boy (God) coming to save us. How he gets so much meaning into some simple lyrics of no more than 1-2 syllables per word. It probably takes a lot to write so simply.

That's something also echoed by a great country songwriter called Billy Joe Shaver - he talked about writing songs with simple words that everyone can understand, because emotions are something everybody can understand if conveyed in a language they can understand. Music to some degree is already a universal language, so lyrics that are as simple as possible I think are a good approach when trying to reach people. It's not the only way tho, those are just my current thoughts on it... Some writers out there destroy with emotion even tho they might not use simple language. Not sure it's a good example but Joni Mitchell comes to mind - I can't say she has simple lyrics but oh boy the tears fly when I hear her music. disclaimer tho I haven't listened to nearly enough Joni and I may be wrong about this. on a quick google her top results have 100% understandable and simple lyrics so I guess... point still valid?

Anyway good song!

It's cool. I felt it deserves a second listen after a day before I said anything about lyrics. I like the music and composition, and it fits the emotion of being in a place and accepting it altho somewhere in the back of the mind you're thinking, "what else is there?", at least that's how I interpret the song. I think in terms of lyrics it gets a bit too complicated for me to follow, and it's something I realized after a fellow weeklybeatmeister introduced me to a genius songwriter called Randy Newman - I heard one of his songs (I think he's hiding) about the Big Boy (God) coming to save us. How he gets so much meaning into some simple lyrics of no more than 1-2 syllables per word. It probably takes a lot to write so simply. That's something also echoed by a great country songwriter called Billy Joe Shaver - he talked about writing songs with simple words that everyone can understand, because emotions are something everybody can understand if conveyed in a language they can understand. Music to some degree is already a universal language, so lyrics that are as simple as possible I think are a good approach when trying to reach people. It's not the only way tho, those are just my current thoughts on it... Some writers out there destroy with emotion even tho they might not use simple language. Not sure it's a good example but Joni Mitchell comes to mind - I can't say she has simple lyrics but oh boy the tears fly when I hear her music. disclaimer tho I haven't listened to nearly enough Joni and I may be wrong about this. on a quick google her top results have 100% understandable and simple lyrics so I guess... point still valid? Anyway good song!

So happy swinging back and forth to this rhythm. Love the balance with the vocals, they're so clean. Yet another banger to download.

So happy swinging back and forth to this rhythm. Love the balance with the vocals, they're so clean. Yet another banger to download.

Those lyrics are a blast. Really nice work on this one man!!!

Those lyrics are a blast. Really nice work on this one man!!!

Man, your tracks are always inspiring me to get the lyrics notebook, guitar and microphone out of the closet. Maybe next week?

Great stuff, keep it up!

Man, your tracks are always inspiring me to get the lyrics notebook, guitar and microphone out of the closet. Maybe next week? Great stuff, keep it up!

Dude, this is just amazing, as for the lyrics tho

I agree with this sentiment. Maybe it's lack of sleep, but I'm having a hard time picking up what you're putting down, like maybe it could use one more verse

Dude, this is just amazing, as for the lyrics tho [quote=horatiuromantic][spoiler]It's cool. I felt it deserves a second listen after a day before I said anything about lyrics. I like the music and composition, and it fits the emotion of being in a place and accepting it altho somewhere in the back of the mind you're thinking, "what else is there?", at least that's how I interpret the song. I think in terms of lyrics it gets a bit too complicated for me to follow, and it's something I realized after a fellow weeklybeatmeister introduced me to a genius songwriter called Randy Newman - I heard one of his songs (I think he's hiding) about the Big Boy (God) coming to save us. How he gets so much meaning into some simple lyrics of no more than 1-2 syllables per word. It probably takes a lot to write so simply. That's something also echoed by a great country songwriter called Billy Joe Shaver - he talked about writing songs with simple words that everyone can understand, because emotions are something everybody can understand if conveyed in a language they can understand. Music to some degree is already a universal language, so lyrics that are as simple as possible I think are a good approach when trying to reach people. It's not the only way tho, those are just my current thoughts on it... Some writers out there destroy with emotion even tho they might not use simple language. Not sure it's a good example but Joni Mitchell comes to mind - I can't say she has simple lyrics but oh boy the tears fly when I hear her music. disclaimer tho I haven't listened to nearly enough Joni and I may be wrong about this. on a quick google her top results have 100% understandable and simple lyrics so I guess... point still valid? Anyway good song! [/spoiler][/quote] I agree with this sentiment. Maybe it's lack of sleep, but I'm having a hard time picking up what you're putting down, like maybe it could use one more verse

Thanks!  I kind of abandoned that patch and left it as a throw away, but it really grew on me.

Thank you!  Yeah, I definitely am making a point of taking my time on the writing part this year.  Plenty of time to go back and recreate the ones worth doing.  I do like the tired tires thing too, I'm a big fan of alliteration and repetition like that so I think that would totally work.

Thanks man, I appreciate it!

Thanks!  I've been trying to figure out the singing thing so that means a lot!

Thanks dude!

Thanks man!  Haha, yeah after doing nothing all last year I've been trying to force myself to write now, not sure how long I'll be able to keep it up though.  Also, I haven't listened to Doves I don't think, but I'll check them out.

Thanks man!  Yeah that last part came together pretty last minute so glad to hear it was well received. 

Thank you!

Yeah, totally!  I definitely need a kick to get going sometimes and WB is perfect for it.  Glad you liked this one.

Thanks man!  I've definitely been working on not putting the songwriting part on a pedestal lately and its been getting easier.  Just writing down what I hear over the music, then refining it.  Don't get down on your chord stabbing though haha.  Even if some of your ideas start as chord stabs, you grow them into some of the most intricate and well crafted pieces on this site. 

Thanks dude!  Yeah I'm excited to get back at this one later in the year.  Lot of ideas already.

Thanks man, I really appreciate you listening closely.  I do agree with keeping the lyrics simple too.  I'm definitely guilty of busting out the thesaurus and throwing in some words that have no business in there!  Also, I think I really need to check out some Randy Newman. All I really know him from is Family Guy ripping on him, but I just listened to that song you referenced and it sounds awesome.

Thanks Hieme!  I appreciate it.

Thank you!

Dude, I would absolutely love that!  I'm such a big fan of Magdan Mile.  I'm actually going to throw that back in my rotation.

Thank you!  Yes, I totally agree with you too.  I think it made sense to me as far as what emotion was coming out, but there's definitely not a lot to tie the ideas together.  I will try to expand in v2!

[quote=levelcapybara]Those whirring high-end synths sure are hypnotic. Your songs sure pack some neat sounds![/quote] Thanks! I kind of abandoned that patch and left it as a throw away, but it really grew on me. [quote=blighters_rock]Mesmerizing melodies and harmonies. I particularly like the melody on the prechorus bits right before the "I never wanted to be/leave here" sections. The slowdown halfway was unexpected, and I really liked that the whirring on the synth slowed accordingly. As far as lyrics, I think you're already doing great. I think focusing on writing the song has a big payoff, and this is proof. A good song beats a perfect recording seven days a week, but I think this is a good recording too. I love a good pun (e.g. the punishment), so I'll share one I thought of as I was listening and reading along with your lyrics. You use a tire metaphor in the "wearing the treads down on my years" line. Made me think "My tires are tired". Not sure if that's usable, but I would definitely include that sort of thing in the cheesy stuff I write.[/quote] Thank you! Yeah, I definitely am making a point of taking my time on the writing part this year. Plenty of time to go back and recreate the ones worth doing. I do like the tired tires thing too, I'm a big fan of alliteration and repetition like that so I think that would totally work. [quote=djippy]Solid track. Really like the way you sing, harmonies are pretty cool. Agreed that guitar solo could probably worked a little more, but still a cool song.[/quote] Thanks man, I appreciate it! [quote=hent03]This is another great track, man. I think you've got a great voice, and I really like having new stuff to listen to each week. :)[/quote] Thanks! I've been trying to figure out the singing thing so that means a lot! [quote=CosmicCairns]I think the lyrics are solid. I'm often not a fan of repetitive lines, but it really works here both musically and then following it up with a line about repeating yourself and later a mention of echoes ties it all together. Gotta agree with everyone else on that wobbly synth line being cool.[/quote] Thanks dude! [quote=Simon Koehn]Dude, churning out full songs like this week to week is so damn impressive. This is super nice. Love the synths in the verses, gives me Doves vibes. Also, loving these songs of yours that change it up in like a B section/bridge. Really expands the scope of the song and makes you feel like you've gone on a little journey. [/quote] Thanks man! Haha, yeah after doing nothing all last year I've been trying to force myself to write now, not sure how long I'll be able to keep it up though. Also, I haven't listened to Doves I don't think, but I'll check them out. [quote=Kedbreak136]This is a cool track! I like the fast wobbly synth sound in the background. Good vocal and harmonies! I like the intermission with accoustic guitars and how it builds up into the guitar solo. That's one cool tune![/quote] Thanks man! Yeah that last part came together pretty last minute so glad to hear it was well received. [quote=alonemusic]big 90s pop groove through the beginning, proper millennium chic. great vocal melodies too <3[/quote] Thank you! [quote=miraclemiles]Nice one. I like warbling synth. I like these lyrics and the vocal, I get a feeling for what they're conveying and that's important. Yeah that acoustic guitar middle part is a great change, then a nice solo, sweet. Agree with comment above about how focus on that part of the song paid off. It's ok to leave some things for a v2 always. Hard to make those choices, and that's why doing weekly songs is so great, forces us to make choices and actually finish a version. Great v1 and I know the v2 will be huge![/quote] Yeah, totally! I definitely need a kick to get going sometimes and WB is perfect for it. Glad you liked this one. [quote=Tone Matrix]I'm always impressed the singer/songwriters on here are able to churn out the lyrics and music. It's one thing coming up with the poetic feel of it but then to have the rhythm of it and all would just make my tiny brain explode. Meanwhile I'm chord stabbing my piano lol! Really relate to the lyrics. Especially the "just another sunbeat paint job on the highway". Excellent vocal harmonies as well. I could've listened to the oooh and strums even longer :) Very peaceful [/quote] Thanks man! I've definitely been working on not putting the songwriting part on a pedestal lately and its been getting easier. Just writing down what I hear over the music, then refining it. Don't get down on your chord stabbing though haha. Even if some of your ideas start as chord stabs, you grow them into some of the most intricate and well crafted pieces on this site. [quote=NWSPR]Vocals and lyrics are well thought out. Love the layers of chorus rolling in and the mid break is very lush. This is one of your more sparse tracks on the instrumentation. Good drum tracks that stand out as a result of less instrumentation. Definitely look forward to hearing the revised version as it fills out! [/quote] Thanks dude! Yeah I'm excited to get back at this one later in the year. Lot of ideas already. [quote=emily]oooh the breakdown in the middle - lovely piece! Thank you! [img]https://miro.medium.com/max/860/1*16PZNwyrERwruo3aUhsRsw.gif[/img][/quote] [quote=horatiuromantic]It's cool. I felt it deserves a second listen after a day before I said anything about lyrics. I like the music and composition, and it fits the emotion of being in a place and accepting it altho somewhere in the back of the mind you're thinking, "what else is there?", at least that's how I interpret the song. I think in terms of lyrics it gets a bit too complicated for me to follow, and it's something I realized after a fellow weeklybeatmeister introduced me to a genius songwriter called Randy Newman - I heard one of his songs (I think he's hiding) about the Big Boy (God) coming to save us. How he gets so much meaning into some simple lyrics of no more than 1-2 syllables per word. It probably takes a lot to write so simply. That's something also echoed by a great country songwriter called Billy Joe Shaver - he talked about writing songs with simple words that everyone can understand, because emotions are something everybody can understand if conveyed in a language they can understand. Music to some degree is already a universal language, so lyrics that are as simple as possible I think are a good approach when trying to reach people. It's not the only way tho, those are just my current thoughts on it... Some writers out there destroy with emotion even tho they might not use simple language. Not sure it's a good example but Joni Mitchell comes to mind - I can't say she has simple lyrics but oh boy the tears fly when I hear her music. disclaimer tho I haven't listened to nearly enough Joni and I may be wrong about this. on a quick google her top results have 100% understandable and simple lyrics so I guess... point still valid? Anyway good song! [/quote] Thanks man, I really appreciate you listening closely. I do agree with keeping the lyrics simple too. I'm definitely guilty of busting out the thesaurus and throwing in some words that have no business in there! Also, I think I really need to check out some Randy Newman. All I really know him from is Family Guy ripping on him, but I just listened to that song you referenced and it sounds awesome. [quote=2haf]So happy swinging back and forth to this rhythm. Love the balance with the vocals, they're so clean. Yet another banger to download.[/quote] Thanks Hieme! I appreciate it. [quote=Mission Crossing]Those lyrics are a blast. Really nice work on this one man!!![/quote] Thank you! [quote=Sodabelly]Man, your tracks are always inspiring me to get the lyrics notebook, guitar and microphone out of the closet. Maybe next week? Great stuff, keep it up![/quote] Dude, I would absolutely love that! I'm such a big fan of Magdan Mile. I'm actually going to throw that back in my rotation. [quote=Devieus]Dude, this is just amazing, as for the lyrics tho [quote=horatiuromantic][spoiler]It's cool. I felt it deserves a second listen after a day before I said anything about lyrics. I like the music and composition, and it fits the emotion of being in a place and accepting it altho somewhere in the back of the mind you're thinking, "what else is there?", at least that's how I interpret the song. I think in terms of lyrics it gets a bit too complicated for me to follow, and it's something I realized after a fellow weeklybeatmeister introduced me to a genius songwriter called Randy Newman - I heard one of his songs (I think he's hiding) about the Big Boy (God) coming to save us. How he gets so much meaning into some simple lyrics of no more than 1-2 syllables per word. It probably takes a lot to write so simply. That's something also echoed by a great country songwriter called Billy Joe Shaver - he talked about writing songs with simple words that everyone can understand, because emotions are something everybody can understand if conveyed in a language they can understand. Music to some degree is already a universal language, so lyrics that are as simple as possible I think are a good approach when trying to reach people. It's not the only way tho, those are just my current thoughts on it... Some writers out there destroy with emotion even tho they might not use simple language. Not sure it's a good example but Joni Mitchell comes to mind - I can't say she has simple lyrics but oh boy the tears fly when I hear her music. disclaimer tho I haven't listened to nearly enough Joni and I may be wrong about this. on a quick google her top results have 100% understandable and simple lyrics so I guess... point still valid? Anyway good song! [/spoiler][/quote] I agree with this sentiment. Maybe it's lack of sleep, but I'm having a hard time picking up what you're putting down, like maybe it could use one more verse[/quote] Thank you! Yes, I totally agree with you too. I think it made sense to me as far as what emotion was coming out, but there's definitely not a lot to tie the ideas together. I will try to expand in v2!

lol I did not expect to hear that, thanks! A little busy this week but I'll definitely try to put something together with guitar and vocals soon!

[quote=Chrisfoo]Dude, I would absolutely love that! I'm such a big fan of Magdan Mile. I'm actually going to throw that back in my rotation.[/quote] lol I did not expect to hear that, thanks! A little busy this week but I'll definitely try to put something together with guitar and vocals soon!

You asked for lyrics feedback, so here I go.  Take with a grain of salt!

It all depends on what you wanted to achieve, but I’ll tell you what I heard/read.

Some good thematic repetition with words about movement:

slow down, leaning into the wind, get back to where i was, dissipates, hold you down, scale tips, can’t stay, highway, wearing the treads, trying to run

Nice metaphors that join with the actual echos in the chorus:

“patterns that hold you down, don’t have to repeat yourself, echos don’t decay

Another nice thing was your internal rhymes with “bar was set / can never get, dissipates/articulates, tell/dwell, blinder/reminders”

Something that I really love about country music, that I’ve been trying to apply, is “character development from the point of view of the narrator” and I think this song is about someone who never wanted to be where they are, they have these regrets about leaving the past (never get back to where i was, unmet expectations, constant reminders) and then the last verse is like

“this is going to happen again and i’ll be somewhere else, so i guess i’ll see you later”

you said “some things just change through the years” and maybe the thing that changed was the music itself as we go into the breakdown?

When I write lyrics, I kind of plan out how many choruses/verses, and then I have to try to make everything fit like a puzzle.  and try to make as many connections (or contradictions) as I can, either thematically, rhythmically, etc.

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also listen to blighters_rock more than me because their lyrics are better!

You asked for lyrics feedback, so here I go. Take with a grain of salt! It all depends on what you wanted to achieve, but I’ll tell you what I heard/read. Some good thematic repetition with words about movement: slow down, leaning into the wind, get back to where i was, dissipates, hold you down, scale tips, can’t stay, highway, wearing the treads, trying to run Nice metaphors that join with the actual echos in the chorus: “patterns that hold you down, don’t have to repeat yourself, echos don’t decay Another nice thing was your internal rhymes with “bar was set / can never get, dissipates/articulates, tell/dwell, blinder/reminders” Something that I really love about country music, that I’ve been trying to apply, is “character development from the point of view of the narrator” and I think this song is about someone who never wanted to be where they are, they have these regrets about leaving the past (never get back to where i was, unmet expectations, constant reminders) and then the last verse is like “this is going to happen again and i’ll be somewhere else, so i guess i’ll see you later” you said “some things just change through the years” and maybe the thing that changed was the music itself as we go into the breakdown? When I write lyrics, I kind of plan out how many choruses/verses, and then I have to try to make everything fit like a puzzle. and try to make as many connections (or contradictions) as I can, either thematically, rhythmically, etc. THANK YOU FOR COMING TO MY TED TALK <3 [quote=blighters_rock]A good song beats a perfect recording seven days a week[/quote] *CLAP EMOJI* *CLAP EMOJI* *CLAP EMOJI* also listen to blighters_rock more than me because their lyrics are better!

Thanks so much for the feedback and thorough analysis!  I'll be honest, a lot of the things you pointed out were not even done intentionally (or at least consciously), but its so awesome that you pointed them out because being able to design a song with those things in mind will do wonders for my process/the end result.

Also, @blighters_rock absolutely has some fantastic lyrics!  I've really been enjoying his tracks this year.

[quote=orangedrink]You asked for lyrics feedback, so here I go. Take with a grain of salt! It all depends on what you wanted to achieve, but I’ll tell you what I heard/read. Some good thematic repetition with words about movement: slow down, leaning into the wind, get back to where i was, dissipates, hold you down, scale tips, can’t stay, highway, wearing the treads, trying to run Nice metaphors that join with the actual echos in the chorus: “patterns that hold you down, don’t have to repeat yourself, echos don’t decay Another nice thing was your internal rhymes with “bar was set / can never get, dissipates/articulates, tell/dwell, blinder/reminders” Something that I really love about country music, that I’ve been trying to apply, is “character development from the point of view of the narrator” and I think this song is about someone who never wanted to be where they are, they have these regrets about leaving the past (never get back to where i was, unmet expectations, constant reminders) and then the last verse is like “this is going to happen again and i’ll be somewhere else, so i guess i’ll see you later” you said “some things just change through the years” and maybe the thing that changed was the music itself as we go into the breakdown? When I write lyrics, I kind of plan out how many choruses/verses, and then I have to try to make everything fit like a puzzle. and try to make as many connections (or contradictions) as I can, either thematically, rhythmically, etc. THANK YOU FOR COMING TO MY TED TALK <3 [quote=blighters_rock]A good song beats a perfect recording seven days a week[/quote] *CLAP EMOJI* *CLAP EMOJI* *CLAP EMOJI* also listen to blighters_rock more than me because their lyrics are better![/quote] Thanks so much for the feedback and thorough analysis! I'll be honest, a lot of the things you pointed out were not even done intentionally (or at least consciously), but its so awesome that you pointed them out because being able to design a song with those things in mind will do wonders for my process/the end result. Also, @blighters_rock absolutely has some fantastic lyrics! I've really been enjoying his tracks this year.

The vocal melodies here are so good, that bass is real groovy, and the second portion of the song is just beautiful
I love the tasteful amount of distortion on your vocals too. I always have trouble getting that type of sound.

The vocal melodies here are so good, that bass is real groovy, and the second portion of the song is just beautiful I love the tasteful amount of distortion on your vocals too. I always have trouble getting that type of sound.

Even with the bassline being a loop, I really like it. Your tracks have a flow that I wish I could get in mine. You got a good groove going here. Shades down.

Even with the bassline being a loop, I really like it. Your tracks have a flow that I wish I could get in mine. You got a good groove going here. Shades down.