The first half so far is quite nice. It feels a little noodly - there isn't a very distinct melody. Initially I was asking myself, "where's the shift?" but it's pretty clear in the song where the transition is. I actually think it's handled well - the light strumming seems to lead the listener to expect something different. I suppose you could have used some pivot chords or something and a little more of a build-up. The second half isn't too far away mood-wise from the first half if you ask me. It's a little brighter and more rocking, but still has pensive emotions to it. I did feel that it ended a bit too soon - just as I was expecting a big solo it started to fade out. I was hoping to hear it rock out a little more there.

There was some interesting arrangement there. I think the transition sounds a little better than it might have looked in the project. Good job.

The first half so far is quite nice. It feels a little noodly - there isn't a very distinct melody. Initially I was asking myself, "where's the shift?" but it's pretty clear in the song where the transition is. I actually think it's handled well - the light strumming seems to lead the listener to expect something different. I suppose you could have used some pivot chords or something and a little more of a build-up. The second half isn't too far away mood-wise from the first half if you ask me. It's a little brighter and more rocking, but still has pensive emotions to it. I did feel that it ended a bit too soon - just as I was expecting a big solo it started to fade out. I was hoping to hear it rock out a little more there. There was some interesting arrangement there. I think the transition sounds a little better than it might have looked in the project. Good job.

The shift is subtle, but maybe a harsher one could be fun.

That is a freaky fact about 27.  Pi scares me after seeing the movie "Pi"

Good comments from Arcana!

The shift is subtle, but maybe a harsher one could be fun. That is a freaky fact about 27. Pi scares me after seeing the movie "Pi" Good comments from Arcana!

Thank you! Great take on this--there was in fact a melody that I started with, and a number of the other parts were in response to it, but I didn't end up using it in the end. That might be a good revision, in fact.  (There is that little hint at a solo at the very end, though it does end early.)

Agreed! And thank you!

[quote=Arcana]The first half so far is quite nice. It feels a little noodly - there isn't a very distinct melody. Initially I was asking myself, "where's the shift?" but it's pretty clear in the song where the transition is. I actually think it's handled well - the light strumming seems to lead the listener to expect something different. I suppose you could have used some pivot chords or something and a little more of a build-up. The second half isn't too far away mood-wise from the first half if you ask me. It's a little brighter and more rocking, but still has pensive emotions to it. I did feel that it ended a bit too soon - just as I was expecting a big solo it started to fade out. I was hoping to hear it rock out a little more there. There was some interesting arrangement there. I think the transition sounds a little better than it might have looked in the project. Good job.[/quote] Thank you! Great take on this--there was in fact a melody that I started with, and a number of the other parts were in response to it, but I didn't end up using it in the end. That might be a good revision, in fact. (There is that little hint at a solo at the very end, though it does end early.) [quote=orangedrink]The shift is subtle, but maybe a harsher one could be fun. That is a freaky fact about 27. Pi scares me after seeing the movie "Pi" Good comments from Arcana![/quote] Agreed! And thank you!

really lovely - 27 is my favorite #

really lovely - 27 is my favorite #