What would you have changed?
- Ebrit

What would you have changed? - Ebrit

in general, it's unsatisfying. the emotional core fails to connect (i think because of the arrangement and mix).

overall lacking impact. see break down around 1:30m mark up to 2m, the track stands still, and then the second build up at 2:40m just does not land. synth at the end is a bit too "mosquito in my ear" and not "sick silky space brass"

in a redo, I would... add impactful musical content? lol (EZ!)

for the second part of the track bring in a totally different drum section (switch it around at the bassline to make way for the bass, turn the synths down by half, and layer in a nice chord progression underneath that synth to push the emotions forward. introduce the end line in the breakdown, but use a soft, percussive sound, then slam that brassy sound in for the last run like it is now, over a stronger beat/bass that isn't moving quite as fast.

like
Daaaa nanana Nnaaaaa nana
NAAAA nanana NAAA wahhh
nana naaaaaa 

with the beat going half time maybe? but really punching on the beat
Booooom,duf duf
SNAp tickckckckc

instead that beat at the end seems like some part that accidentally started to play again.

[quote=Devieus]What would you have changed? - Ebrit[/quote] in general, it's unsatisfying. the emotional core fails to connect (i think because of the arrangement and mix). overall lacking impact. see break down around 1:30m mark up to 2m, the track stands still, and then the second build up at 2:40m just does not land. synth at the end is a bit too "mosquito in my ear" and not "sick silky space brass" in a redo, I would... add impactful musical content? lol (EZ!) for the second part of the track bring in a totally different drum section (switch it around at the bassline to make way for the bass, turn the synths down by half, and layer in a nice chord progression underneath that synth to push the emotions forward. introduce the end line in the breakdown, but use a soft, percussive sound, then slam that brassy sound in for the last run like it is now, over a stronger beat/bass that isn't moving quite as fast. like Daaaa nanana Nnaaaaa nana NAAAA nanana NAAA wahhh nana naaaaaa with the beat going half time maybe? but really punching on the beat Booooom,duf duf SNAp tickckckckc instead that beat at the end seems like some part that accidentally started to play again.

I can see that, good luck with that.
I will say though, the part at 2:40 is fine, though perhaps not as buildup, it could be a solid outro.

I can see that, good luck with that. I will say though, the part at 2:40 is fine, though perhaps not as buildup, it could be a solid outro.