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Our First Date

By Edmund Snyder on February 11, 2016 8:36 pm

Back to my roots (yeah right, like I have roots), I guess.

This has the guitars, vocals, bass guitar, and drums that made me famous (another "yeah right").

Recorded with my new Bluetube v2 preamp with a JJ tube instead of the factory Chinese junk.  I think this thing is going to be a great replacement for the Audiobox USB.

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I was crazy 'bout you, babe,
and I thought you felt the same.
I asked you to a movie,
but you said that one was lame.
We settle on dinner
and a walk in the park.
By the time our time had finished
it was starting to get dark.

My car died on the roadside
and the skies started to rain.
My cracked windshield was pouring on you,
but you were too sweet to complain.
When we finally got you home
your mom screamed that I was late.
I never will forget you and our first date.

I was mad for you girl,
and I know you felt it too.
But we were both too young
to ever see it through.

My car died on the roadside
and the skies started to rain.
My cracked windshield was pouring on you,
but you were too sweet to complain.
When we finally got you home
your mom screamed that I was late.
I never will forget you and our first date.

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February 15, 2016 12:14 am

Wow... great vox and harmonies. Nice work! Always great to hear a well crafted pop song and vocal arrangement. Hearing some kind of compression issue (for lack of better description) that's messing with the mix.

February 15, 2016 2:19 am

Yes, this is really good; just the right amount of instrumental tonal drift. Agree about the compression/limiting.

February 15, 2016 11:19 am

Bright n cute. We've all been there!
Loving the bassline, grabbed me straight away.

February 15, 2016 3:16 pm

Geez, what happened to your car?

February 15, 2016 4:32 pm
NWSPR wrote:

Wow... great vox and harmonies. Nice work! Always great to hear a well crafted pop song and vocal arrangement. Hearing some kind of compression issue (for lack of better description) that's messing with the mix.


Thanks.  Yeah, I was running out of time and said "good enough."


Jim Wood wrote:

Yes, this is really good; just the right amount of instrumental tonal drift. Agree about the compression/limiting.

Thank you.  Original melody, but I borrowed the chord progression from the Rod Stewart song "I Don't Want to Talk About It."  You can't tell, though, because other than that the song is completely different.



Lyons wrote:

Bright n cute. We've all been there!
Loving the bassline, grabbed me straight away.

Thank you.  I've been a bassist a lot longer than I've been a guitarist.



Ipaghost wrote:

Geez, what happened to your car?

It was an AMC Hornet... need I say more?  In addition to the issues mentioned in this song, it also had a driver's side floorboard that was an actual piece of plywood that I had screwed into place over the rusted out hole.  It was either the plywood, or pretend I was driving a Flintstone's car.  But I was 17 at the time, so...

February 16, 2016 6:44 pm

Lyrics are really cute, and I really like the whole kind-hearted story.

Sonicwise, I see a big problem in here: lead guitar is ALWAYS making figures and don't give space to the voice. They're always competing and fighting for the listener's attention. THat's very common in guitarrist who first lay down the guitar parts and then the lyrics.

IMHO, why don't you try a simple: intro => ( drums + rhythm guitar ) => verse (drums + bass + rhythm + vocals) => bridge ( bass + rhythm variation + lead guitar => 2nd verse => outro (drums + bass + rhytm + soloing guitar). Plus, the drums are quite linear and don't make any fills inbetween groups of bars.

That being said, it's easy for me to throw this out when I'm not writing any lyrics or vocals on my work, so kudos to you, as I've mentioned several times, becasu you do double effort as a lyricist and singer.

I think the vibe of nostalgic romantic innocence in this song deserves further development.

What DAW are U using, Edmund? is it Presonus Studio One, right?   

February 16, 2016 8:06 pm
laguna wrote:

Lyrics are really cute, and I really like the whole kind-hearted story.

Sonicwise, I see a big problem in here: lead guitar is ALWAYS making figures and don't give space to the voice. They're always competing and fighting for the listener's attention. THat's very common in guitarrist who first lay down the guitar parts and then the lyrics.

IMHO, why don't you try a simple: intro => ( drums + rhythm guitar ) => verse (drums + bass + rhythm + vocals) => bridge ( bass + rhythm variation + lead guitar => 2nd verse => outro (drums + bass + rhytm + soloing guitar). Plus, the drums are quite linear and don't make any fills inbetween groups of bars.

That being said, it's easy for me to throw this out when I'm not writing any lyrics or vocals on my work, so kudos to you, as I've mentioned several times, becasu you do double effort as a lyricist and singer.

I think the vibe of nostalgic romantic innocence in this song deserves further development.

What DAW are U using, Edmund? is it Presonus Studio One, right?


Yes, I use Studio One.  I think my biggest issue now is that I run out of time and have to say "good enough." That doesn't mean that I don't still appreciate your advice because it's usually very good and has helped me grow immeasurably as I'm sure it will continue to do.

February 16, 2016 9:17 pm
Edmund Snyder wrote:


Yes, I use Studio One.  I think my biggest issue now is that I run out of time and have to say "good enough." That doesn't mean that I don't still appreciate your advice because it's usually very good and has helped me grow immeasurably as I'm sure it will continue to do.

Well, I didn't mean to be harsh on the song. I completely understand that feeling. I really mean it's very difficult what you (and a few other) lyricists are achieving here. I really liked the vibe of it.

Maybe If you wish you could send me some audio tracks and we could work them together, because I feel sometimes producers tend to "make judgements", which it easy, but don't back our statements with actual work.

Let me know if you dig the idea, Edmund.

February 16, 2016 10:05 pm
laguna wrote:
Edmund Snyder wrote:


Yes, I use Studio One.  I think my biggest issue now is that I run out of time and have to say "good enough." That doesn't mean that I don't still appreciate your advice because it's usually very good and has helped me grow immeasurably as I'm sure it will continue to do.

Well, I didn't mean to be harsh on the song. I completely understand that feeling. I really mean it's very difficult what you (and a few other) lyricists are achieving here. I really liked the vibe of it.

Maybe If you wish you could send me some audio tracks and we could work them together, because I feel sometimes producers tend to "make judgements", which it easy, but don't back our statements with actual work.

Let me know if you dig the idea, Edmund.


I don't really use dropbox, but I could set up a Google Drive folder and give you access to it in which I could put some stems.  I'd like a day or so to create some drum fills and maybe a strummed chord track instead of just the plucked fingerstyle and "lead" parts that are currently available.  That would give you a bit more to work with.  I also don't have separate vox harmony tracks for this particular song because I was testing out a new .vst that I got (izotope Nectar 2), but I can export both the dry and wet vox tracks if that would be useful.

I would love to hear what your ears and skills could do with it.

February 17, 2016 1:59 am
Edmund Snyder wrote:


I don't really use dropbox, but I could set up a Google Drive folder and give you access to it in which I could put some stems.  I'd like a day or so to create some drum fills and maybe a strummed chord track instead of just the plucked fingerstyle and "lead" parts that are currently available.  That would give you a bit more to work with.  I also don't have separate vox harmony tracks for this particular song because I was testing out a new .vst that I got (izotope Nectar 2), but I can export both the dry and wet vox tracks if that would be useful.

I would love to hear what your ears and skills could do with it.

Will be my pleasure. I think I'll manage with GoogleDrive. Drop me an email from my profile so we could stay in touch. You can also find me on Soundcloud

February 20, 2016 5:33 am

great to hear you sing again.

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